Friday, November 1, 2013

Halloween

The day I get home from school oh do I get sick. I can't believe I'm sick on Halloween and I haven't Evan been trick or treating yet.my throat is so soar I can't swallow with out my throat hurting my mom said it was a cold and to warm up some chicken noodle soup for the throat. and once I do and take it to the living room. I drink it and boom the bowl falls right on the floor and my tong it dark red so burned I basically cry I rush to the cold sink and flood my mouth with ice cold water after at least 3 minutes of steam wavering out of my mouth I find that my throat just might be the sorest of all time now that trick or treaters come to my house and take the candy my throat is so soar my mouth is flooding with saliva cause if I dare swallow it will hurt like drinking the boiling water from a hot stove so I get a bowl and I littered spit in to the bowl all night long cause I can not swallow I find my self so messed up now my throat hurts more and my nose is just stuffed my mother says you can't got trick or treating what I have been waiting one whole year for is gone that was my Halloween 
 

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  1. S: action and flow
    TP: dialogue, thoughts, more description of how you feel/what you look like

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